2009年考研英語40篇大作文演練與名師點評

第六篇

　　6 Study the following drawing carefully and write an essay in which you should:

　　1. describe the drawing,

　　2. interpret its meaning, and

　　3. make your comment.

　　You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

　　該文分三段。第一段描述圖畫并定性說這種做法是極端危險的。第二段從兩個方面進行剖析。最后一段表明自己的觀點，并提出解決辦法。In the picture presented to us, a person is investing all the money in the stock market—he even sells his car and raises a mortgage on his apartment. To me, a bystander, this is an extremely dangerous action.

　　Why has he become so crazy? He must be dreaming of making big money one day, but does he know that it has become exceedingly difficult for individual investors to survive in today�餾 stock market? On the one hand, the market is full of institutional investors who are equipped with not only advanced techniques but also latest information. On the other hand, anyone is told that only a small part of people will make money in the market when he enters the market, but when his mind is full of greedy ideas, how can he carry out careful analysis and comprehensive reasoning so as to make sound judgment?

　　Personally I do not agree with the above choice at all. My suggestion is that anyone who wants to make money should receive professional training and then practice in the virtual market for at least a year. If a person can not do that, he had better leave this place full of danger and risks, for it will often be too late when he realizes that the cost is unbearable.第一段對圖畫進行了描述。而后立即對這種做法進行定性，顯得相當果斷。如果不加這句話，第一段則只有一句，顯得有點短了。

　　第二段首先使用一短一長兩個反問句的經典用法，非常有力——他為什么變得如此瘋狂？他一定想賺大錢，但是他知道在今天的股市中個人投資者的生存已變得極端困難了嗎？而后分兩方面談：先說市場中充斥著兼具技術和信息的機構投資者；而后說每個人進場前都聽說只有少數(shù)人賺錢，但是當腦中充滿貪欲之時，哪里還能用細致分析和充分推理來幫助做出正確的判斷呢？

　　第三段的首句斬釘截鐵地表示自己不同意上述的選擇。而后提出建議：任何人進入市場前必須經過專業(yè)培訓，并且在虛擬股市中錘煉至少一年。如果做不到，就應該遠離這充滿危險的地方。要想在大作文上得到高分，是很不容易的事情�！拔乃瓶瓷讲幌财健保�在結構和內容達到要求之后，語言上可以作一點變化。該文的第二段共使用了三處反問句，這是一種相當新穎的手法。一般來說，連用兩個反問句已經是一種高級寫法，主要有兩個平行反問句(如均是條件狀語從句加反問句)和一短一長兩種情形。這里用了三個反問句，與看到圖中人物極度不理智的做法后的一吐為快的心情是相吻合的。