六級(jí)寫(xiě)作經(jīng)典范文及點(diǎn)評(píng)：大學(xué)生的壓力

　　很多人都認(rèn)為那些身處象牙塔的大學(xué)生們過(guò)得很安逸，其實(shí)不然。他們每天也要面臨著很多壓力：高額學(xué)費(fèi)帶來(lái)的經(jīng)濟(jì)壓力，父母要求過(guò)高所帶來(lái)的精神壓力…

　　College Pressure

　　I see two kinds of pressure working on college students today: economic pressure, parental pressure. It is easy to look around for rebels — to blame the colleges for charging too much money, the parents for pushing them too far. But there are no rebels, only victims.

　　The pressure is heavy on students who just want to graduate and get a job. If I were an employer I would rather employ graduates who have this range and curiosity than those who narrowly pursued safe subjects and high grades. I know incalculable students whose inquiring minds cheer me. I like to hear the play of their ideas. I don’t know if they are getting A or C, and I don’t care. I also like them as people. The country needs them, and they will find satisfying jobs. I tell them to relax, but they can’t.

　　Nor can I blame them. They live in a brutal economy. Today it is not unusual for a student, even if he works part time at college and full time during the summer, to increase to 5, 000 in loans after graduation.Encouraged at commencement to go forth into the world, he is already behind as he goes forth. How could he not feel under pressure throughout college to prepare for this day of reckoning①?

　　Along with economic pressure goes parental pressure. Inevitably, the two are deeply integrated.

　　Poor students! They are caught in one of the oldest webs of love and duty and guilt. The parents mean well: they are trying to steer their sons and daughters toward a secure future. But the sons and daughters want to major in history or classics or philosophy—subjects with no “practical” value. Where’s the payoff on the humanities? It’s not easy to persuade such loving parents that the humanities do indeed pay off. The intellectual faculties developed by studying subjects like history and classics are just the faculties that make creative leaders in business or almost any general field.

　　Luckily for me, most of them got into their field by an indirect route, to their surprise, after many roundabout ways. They can hardly conceive of a career that was not preplanned. They can hardly imagine allowing the hand of God or chance to nudge them down some unforeseen trail.

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　　行文點(diǎn)評(píng)

　　本文脈絡(luò)清晰。第一段第一句直接點(diǎn)題，提出大學(xué)生面臨的兩種壓力：economic pressure和 parental pressure。段末“victims”一詞的運(yùn)用，奠定了本文的感情基調(diào)：作者對(duì)大學(xué)生擔(dān)負(fù)的壓力感到同情。

　　第二段和第三段中分析了大學(xué)生在經(jīng)濟(jì)上面臨壓力的原因。第四段是過(guò)渡段。第五段闡述了父母的壓力對(duì)大學(xué)生的影響，用一個(gè)感嘆句開(kāi)頭，具有烘托感情的效果,充分表達(dá)了作者對(duì)大學(xué)生的同情。最后一段排比句的應(yīng)用從相反的方面描述，更把大學(xué)生所遭受的壓力凸顯出來(lái)。

　　好文妙譯

　　大學(xué)生的壓力

　　我發(fā)覺(jué)今天的大學(xué)生有兩種壓力：經(jīng)濟(jì)壓力和來(lái)自父母的壓力。環(huán)顧四周，你很容易發(fā)現(xiàn)一些叛逆者，他們指責(zé)學(xué)校收費(fèi)太高，報(bào)怨父母對(duì)他們的要求過(guò)高。但他們不是叛逆者，而是受害者。

　　對(duì)于那些只想從大學(xué)畢業(yè)并且找到一個(gè)工作的人來(lái)說(shuō)，壓力是很大的。如果我是雇主，我寧愿雇傭那些有好奇心的博學(xué)之才而不是那些只選一些容易過(guò)的且能達(dá)高分的課程的學(xué)生。我認(rèn)識(shí)無(wú)數(shù)學(xué)生，他們的好奇之心使我興奮不已。我喜歡聽(tīng)他們闡述自己的觀點(diǎn)。我不知道他們得的是A還是C，我不在乎這些。我也同樣喜歡他們所散發(fā)出來(lái)的人性魅力。國(guó)家需要他們，他們也會(huì)找到自己滿(mǎn)意的工作。我告訴他們要放松，但他們做不到。

　　但我也不能責(zé)怪他們，因?yàn)樗麄兩�活在殘酷的�?jīng)濟(jì)時(shí)代。今天對(duì)一個(gè)學(xué)生來(lái)說(shuō)，即使他在念書(shū)時(shí)兼職打工，在暑假全職工作，在畢業(yè)后欠下5000美元的債務(wù)也是很平常的。在畢業(yè)典禮上他們被告知即將踏入社會(huì)，而事實(shí)上，在踏入社會(huì)之際他已落后于他人了。為了面對(duì)這個(gè)清算日，他們?cè)诖髮W(xué)生活中怎會(huì)感受不到壓力呢?

　　與經(jīng)濟(jì)壓力同時(shí)存在的還有來(lái)自父母的壓力，這兩者不可避免地融合在一起。

　　可憐的學(xué)生們!他們被古老的愛(ài)、責(zé)任、負(fù)疚感所包圍。父母?jìng)儽疽馐呛玫?他們正把自己的兒女引向一個(gè)安全的未來(lái)。但這些孩子卻想主修歷史、古典文學(xué)、哲學(xué)這些沒(méi)有“現(xiàn)實(shí)”價(jià)值的專(zhuān)業(yè)。學(xué)人文科學(xué)的報(bào)償在何處呢?要說(shuō)服父母相信人文科學(xué)有所報(bào)償并不容易。由學(xué)習(xí)歷史和古典文學(xué)所培養(yǎng)出來(lái)的能力正是商業(yè)及其他一般領(lǐng)域有創(chuàng)造力的領(lǐng)導(dǎo)人所必備的能力。

　　幸運(yùn)的是，許多學(xué)生幾經(jīng)曲折終于到達(dá)他們自己的領(lǐng)域，對(duì)此他們感到吃驚。因?yàn)樗麄兒茈y想象可以從事一項(xiàng)未經(jīng)事先計(jì)劃的事業(yè)，很難想象上帝之手或者機(jī)緣能把他們推到未曾預(yù)見(jiàn)到的人生軌道上來(lái)。

　　詞匯斟酌

　　��rebel n.反叛分子，反對(duì)者

　　��victim n.犧牲品，受害者

　　��curiosity n.好奇(心)

　　��brutala.殘忍的,無(wú)情的，冷酷的

　　��commencement n.①開(kāi)始②畢業(yè)典禮，學(xué)位授予典禮

　　��reckoning n.結(jié)算，清算

　　��inevitably ad.不可避免地

　　��steer vt.引導(dǎo)

　　��faculty n.能力，技能，天賦

　　��roundabout a.繞道的，繞圈子的

　　��conceive vi.(of)構(gòu)想出，設(shè)想

　　��nudge vt.用肘輕推，推進(jìn)

　　佳句臨摹

　�、佟咀⑨尅縜 day of reckoning 得到懲罰的日子

　　【臨摹】You’re enjoying yourself now, but a day of reckoning will come.別看你現(xiàn)在逍遙，將來(lái)會(huì)遭報(bào)應(yīng)的。

　　思如泉涌

　　No sweet without sweat. 先苦后甜。

　　Pain past is pleasure. 過(guò)去的痛苦就是快樂(lè)。

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